I limp alone, with a hand on my breast
content I tried for the one I loved best,
clasping my cloak, tight in my hand
rushing to flee, from this dying land,
for since you have left, so has the red,
from the roses left rotting, rest of them dead,
the dirt in my wake, rising so lofty,
reminds me of the grass, once growing so softly
And now that I reminisce, I do of your hair,
a curtain of black silk, in the arid air,
your sunburned arms, and Apollo the cruel,
yet visage non dusky, myself but a fool
held no shade, but silence so dear,
awaited the sunset, the vanquisher of fear,
but the only twilight, the omen of dark,
came therein, ushered a truth so stark,
it imprecated patience, and cursed my being,
blind is a man, whom with eyes unseeing,
looks to the horizon, for the end of the night
but dares not invoke, the sun from shear fright,
A moon it was, that seemed never to wane,
red and rising, to the sky in disdain,
the only hope, was the coming of dawn,
but the sun would be yours, forever and anon,
and Lo! it came, casting a sullenly light,
drowning my world in its melancholy sight,
Drying the wells and wilting the leaves,
Filling the air with my woeful heaves,
That was the time, first when I knew,
price of my bliss, was the memory of you,
but everything fades, and dreams are a part
of losing the ones we hold in our hearts,
let it be known, you did not leave alone,
and left but a wound, to call but my own,
Today in the noon of this undying sun,
no place to hide, and no place to run,
and although it glows now furious still,
it follows what seems her obstinate will,
to make me repent for the heart that I lost,
by burning my own, with the light in accost,
for I left you O woman, to an uncaring lover,
and the hole in my heart, is the one I now cover
“To love is to covet, to dream is to hurt, to have is to lose and to live is to heal.”
Steel your heart…fine poem, sir, a rapture, an art.
Thank you, thank you so much.
I felt it had some dissonance in flow.
But I highly enjoyed it, I know that feel bro.
^_^
Hmmm, I’m afraid it does, but good to know you enjoyed it nonetheless.
Regards
Excellent poem, and well written too. Your wordplay is good. Good piece.
Thank you so much.
You’re welcome.
So beautifully written. I feel like sometimes rhymes can sound forced, but that wasn’t the case here… Highly enjoyed this piece. 🙂
Thank you, these words mean a lot to me.
Hello P&P…loved your poem…so poetically done…it was fun to read the rhythm you played, so joyously won! Thank you for stopping by and being a follower too, I appreciate your thoughts of kindness. All the best.
You’re welcome, and thank you for the reciprocation.
You may have written my life story….especially love “That was the time, first when I knew,
price of my bliss, was the memory of you,”
I’m sorry to read that Natalie, but I do hope you find the silver lining to life.
you have a beautiful gift that you use beautifully….
one who has lost a dream, had there heart broken….
can relate even if words don’t say it aloud….
Take care…
I will enjoy following your thoughts….
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ladyblue
Thank you so much, that means a lot.
Beautifully crafted. Thanks for sharing it with us!
You’re welcome, and thanks for the kind words.
Such a beauty woven so smoothly. Very delicate, kind sir. Complete exaltation.
Thank you Hira, are you from Pakistan?
Yes, I am.
Although blogging is a wonderful experience in itself but it becomes all the more refreshing when I see writers from my own country sharing their work on this platform. Regardless, I look forward to reading your work Hira.
Regards,
Osama Iftikhar
I know this feeling. It is really great to know if any of the fellow, from own country, is sharing in the wide sea of syllables. Thank you, for the kind words.
I hope to read from your side, now and then. Glad to have stumbled across your this exquisite end.
Bless you!
What a beauty!Loved the flow & specially loved the lines ,”hat was the time, first when I knew,
price of my bliss, was the memory of you,
but everything fades, and dreams are a part
of losing the ones we hold in our hearts,
let it be known, you did not leave alone,
and left but a wound, to call but my own.”
Thank you, I am pleased to know that you enjoyed my words.
I love poetry & this was sublime-so enjoyed it thoroughly:-)
Great piece! It will be difficult to forget.
Thank you, is that not the point of poetry, remembrance?
Thank you for visiting my poor efforts at http://ja2da.com – I’m afraid they don’t match yours!
David
You’re welcome, and David I fear you are wrong, for there are no comparisons in art.
Thank you – that’s very kind of you
David
Very Well written. 🙂
Thankyou.
I really enjoyed this.
I am pleased to know that Tammy, thank you for visiting.
perfect one saami ! (Y)
Thank you Faizan yaar, means a lot.
🙂
Glad you found me, so I could find you. Beautifully sad poem. The end brought me to tears. You need to issue a warning…..”grab Kleenex”. 🙂
Such a compliment, thank you.
You are so very welcome….I look forward to looking through your blog. 😀
Please feel at liberty to do so, and do not hold back on the critique.
Beautiful.
Thank you.
I loved this. Very nicely written. 🙂
Thank you, thank you so much.
A piece worth copying in my diary.. Beautiful. What’s remarkable is the fact that every person who’ll ever read this will get a glimpse of his/her own feelings in it.. There are times when people like me think ‘No, what we feel can never be expressed!’ and then people like prove us wrong with such a piece, which to me is like ‘see! i expressed it’.. The poem when stated these lines: “That was the time, first when I knew,……”, it was then that i felt indebted and had to leave a reply. Well done.
Thank you so much Qandeel, your appraisal has truly flattered me, for which I can not help but feel embarrassed. You see, these words are as much the reader’s as they are mine, and that is why you can relate.
Regards.
This is fantastic. I was able to feel ypur vulnerability. The writing was beautiful and the verses disciplined.
Thank you very much, your praising words mean everything.
Beautiful!!
Thank you so much, you are too kind.
great imagery and use of language. Fantastic piece. Thanks for sharing.
Thank you, really this is too much, I am humbled.
This brought tears to my eyes and the words were so tasty it made my jaw drop! GREAT GREAT GREAT
Thank you Adele, I am unworthy of your praise.
Unworthy? I think not Sir. Thank you for following me and I look forward to reading your future posts.
You’re welcome Adele, and I look forward to reading more of your thoughts as well.
Simply beautifully written. Thanks so much for stopping by my blog… I am so glad to have stopped by yours in return!
Thank you and You’re welcome, so am I
Such beautiful piece of work Sir, you are brilliant at weaving thoughts into amazing poetry!
My eyes watered when I read this.
Thank you so much, I am glad you were able to relate to my work.
You are always welcome! 🙂